"I was going for something strange, surrealist, and freaky." - nailed it. This gave me the same texture of goosebumps as Silent Hill, or some of the old J-Horror movies like Kuroneko. I also like how the 'reality' of facility was never clearly defined - it leaves it open to interpretation, and adds to the sense of mystery while reading. Great story.
Part of my struggle with this was I wanted it to be sort of unclear to derive some of the tension BUT I also still wanted the story to be coherent and wow
That was hard. I suppose I'll leave it up to each individual reader on if that was successful or not, but regardless thank you for reading!
Yes! Very creepy vibe and interesting world building elements with the research facility. Also, I went down a rabbit hole with the TRPV2 reference. So thank you for that. Very cool.
I'm glad someone hooked onto that! The somatosensory system is extremely fascinating? The sensory system as a whole is one of my favorite topics in the human body! Thanks for reading 🔥
Thank you! Yes that was exactly what I was after! It was definitely a weird story, but I'm pretty happy with the strange and creepiness that cane out of it!
You know, I'm not sure! I had thought about it, and even had some branching ideas for this strange little research facility, but as of right now I don't have any specific ideas in mind. Though I think there's enough foundation that I could if I decide to.
Wow. I think this is one of your best yet (at least of those I’ve read)!
Thank you! I'm glad I reposted it yesterday, it really got its own little second life with some new readers!
Goosebumps all the way, but I couldn’t stop reading 🥶
Reading this story felt like I was drifting through reality, slowly and on uneven tides. Everything was both scary and completely subjective too.
You have described exactly what I wanted to evoke
And I am so glad I was able to do that.
Thank you!
"I was going for something strange, surrealist, and freaky." - nailed it. This gave me the same texture of goosebumps as Silent Hill, or some of the old J-Horror movies like Kuroneko. I also like how the 'reality' of facility was never clearly defined - it leaves it open to interpretation, and adds to the sense of mystery while reading. Great story.
Thanks so much! You were definitely picking up what I was putting down!
So creepy! I love the description of the creature/ghost. What’s happening isn’t entirely clear which really heightens the tension. Well done!
Thank you!
Part of my struggle with this was I wanted it to be sort of unclear to derive some of the tension BUT I also still wanted the story to be coherent and wow
That was hard. I suppose I'll leave it up to each individual reader on if that was successful or not, but regardless thank you for reading!
and yes it did feel surreal and freaky. You should experiment more, this was cool.
Yes! Very creepy vibe and interesting world building elements with the research facility. Also, I went down a rabbit hole with the TRPV2 reference. So thank you for that. Very cool.
I'm glad someone hooked onto that! The somatosensory system is extremely fascinating? The sensory system as a whole is one of my favorite topics in the human body! Thanks for reading 🔥
I loved it! If strange and creepy was the intention you delivered 100% 🔥
Thank you! Yes that was exactly what I was after! It was definitely a weird story, but I'm pretty happy with the strange and creepiness that cane out of it!
Thanks for reading!
It was amazing. Will there be any continuation? 🤔
You know, I'm not sure! I had thought about it, and even had some branching ideas for this strange little research facility, but as of right now I don't have any specific ideas in mind. Though I think there's enough foundation that I could if I decide to.