I think the shorter sections work well! But I'll read it regardless. Im not sure if it was just this part specifically, but the pace seemed especially well-done. Good switchups between longer paragraphs and short ones. Also, lots of nice mystery setup. Glad to hear this will be a longer serial.
So intense! I'm hooked!
I'm so glad you're enjoying it so far! Thanks so much for giving it a look!
I like long stories. And feel free to add as much dimension as you want.
Thank you, I appreciate your thoughts on the matter!
What a cliffhanger! Great buildup of tension in the tunnels.. What is Commander Saquoa up to?? Looking forward to the next part!!
I can't wait for you to see the next part! Thank you for reading as always!
I think the shorter sections work well! But I'll read it regardless. Im not sure if it was just this part specifically, but the pace seemed especially well-done. Good switchups between longer paragraphs and short ones. Also, lots of nice mystery setup. Glad to hear this will be a longer serial.
Thanks so much for the feedback! I appreciate it! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. Let's keep the ball rolling!
Great pacing (ha). I’m really enjoying this story so far. I especially like the blend of fantasy and sci-fi
Hey, thanks! I'm so glad you're enjoying it! And a fantastic pun, beautifully placed