If it's a comfort, I didnt see any errors at all. I DID see the scene of Akashi under the bug, pretty vividly. The ichor falling down rtound him, Akashi emptying the battery on the lasrifle - lovely, lovely action and imagery throught that battle with a semi-god.
The description of Last Night was really moving. I hope Akashi gets to meet up with Aunty Gee again at the end so she can give him a stiff-upper-lipped nod of approval and maybe even a hug!
If it's a comfort, I didnt see any errors at all. I DID see the scene of Akashi under the bug, pretty vividly. The ichor falling down rtound him, Akashi emptying the battery on the lasrifle - lovely, lovely action and imagery throught that battle with a semi-god.
Thanks for keeping on eye out! I'll admit I was so tired editing, I got to a point where my brain was going "its probably fine... probably."
But yes that scene was a ton of fun, wasn't it! Thanks so much for following along with this story!
The description of Last Night was really moving. I hope Akashi gets to meet up with Aunty Gee again at the end so she can give him a stiff-upper-lipped nod of approval and maybe even a hug!
That was one of my favorite sections so far! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
The parts about Akashi going off to war are definitely the most powerful. Inevitable misery and probable death.
It feels weird to say I'm glad you're picking up on that, but, well, I am! I hope you're enjoying misery and probable death nonetheless!